Daughters Dance

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zephyrwords
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Daughters Dance

Postby zephyrwords » Mon Jul 04, 2016 11:27 pm

Daughters dance like daisy's do,
laugh like lilies, yes it's true.
Smile like sunshine's yellow grin,
bubble boisterous, never grim.
Run like airy summer rain,
rippling like a glad refrain.
Daughter's dance the whole day through.
Colleen

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Cindy
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Daughters Dance

Postby Cindy » Tue Jul 05, 2016 2:46 am

Adorable. Love the poem. :-)

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Daughters Dance

Postby Stella » Tue Jul 05, 2016 8:49 am

Yes, you found the right place Colleen well done :)

a lovely rhyming alliterisen poem i just love the opening line and i will put the format in our "How to understand poetic forms " under the "How to Guides " section.

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Re: Daughters Dance

Postby ShelleyA » Tue Jul 05, 2016 7:45 pm

Hi Colleen. A well crafted rhyming Alliterisen. Good imagery and descriptives. Nice use of simile. Lovely depth of feeling. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Well penned and an enjoyable read.

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Re: Daughters Dance

Postby LorettaYoung » Tue Jul 05, 2016 11:41 pm

Nice Imagery and alliteration Colleen and a very enchanting picture. Well done. Best Loretta

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Re: Daughters Dance

Postby zephyrwords » Sat Jul 09, 2016 10:39 am

Thank you all for your wonderful comments!! ..and what a thrill to have one of my poems used as an example for understanding poetic forms!! I'm honored, Stella! :)
Colleen


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