In The Early Morning Light

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Cindy
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In The Early Morning Light

Postby Cindy » Mon Jul 25, 2016 9:59 pm

In the early morning light
Across the dewy lawn
I watch as a bunny eats clover

He slipped under the fence
Then timidly hopped
In the early morning light

He looked hungrily
At the wildflowers
Across the dewy lawn

Now I linger over my coffee
And gaze out the window...
I watch as a bunny eats clover.











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Re: In The Early Morning Light

Postby Stella » Tue Jul 26, 2016 10:11 am

Aw, lovely images you have painted with your words Cindy and a new form as well... :)

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Re: In The Early Morning Light

Postby Cindy » Tue Jul 26, 2016 11:27 am

Thank you, Stella.

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Re: In The Early Morning Light

Postby ShelleyA » Wed Jul 27, 2016 5:34 pm

A lovely write about the adventure of this rabbit in early morning. A skillfully crafted Cascade; perfect form. Vivid imagery. Good color and shading of your words that promotes and evokes emotion. You paint a delightful picture of this scene that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye. Flow and line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Lovely depth of feeling. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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Re: In The Early Morning Light

Postby Cindy » Thu Jul 28, 2016 12:41 am

Thank you, Shelley.

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Re: In The Early Morning Light

Postby zephyrwords » Thu Jul 28, 2016 10:17 am

Very sweet. I love your simple, but beautiful approach in all your poetry, Cindy.
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Re: In The Early Morning Light

Postby Cindy » Thu Jul 28, 2016 9:19 pm

Thank you very much.


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