Cry ~ tanka poem

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Stella
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Cry ~ tanka poem

Postby Stella » Tue Jul 26, 2016 10:41 am

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My tears brim over
when there is no poetry
beautiful enough
to sing the song in my heart
I cry a thousand kisses


(c) Stella Armour

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Re: Cry ~ tanka poem

Postby ShelleyA » Wed Jul 27, 2016 5:37 pm

A beautiful heartfelt write and presentation. Good brevity. A skillfully crafted Tanka; perfect form. Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm. Deep expression of emotion. Good word choice. Good alliteration with nice assonance and consonance. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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Re: Cry ~ tanka poem

Postby zephyrwords » Thu Jul 28, 2016 10:16 am

So lovely Stella. I've been trying to understand this style of poetry. I've found a couple of different takes on it, so a little confusing (to me), but this is wonderful!
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Re: Cry ~ tanka poem

Postby Stella » Thu Jul 28, 2016 11:05 am

sometimes it's difficult to be a purist, especially with Japanese forms Colleen , so i would advise you to stick to the 57577 form which most English speaking poets use :)

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Re: Cry ~ tanka poem

Postby zephyrwords » Sat Jul 30, 2016 11:15 am

Thank you Stella. I will give it try!
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Re: Cry ~ tanka poem

Postby Cindy » Sun Aug 14, 2016 11:33 am

This is very lovely, Stella.

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Re: Cry ~ tanka poem

Postby Tom Balch » Wed Sep 07, 2016 11:00 am

Beautiful Tanka poem, Stella...One we can all relate with...


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