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Cry ~ tanka poem
Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2016 10:41 am
by Stella
My tears brim over
when there is no poetry
beautiful enough
to sing the song in my heart
I cry a thousand kisses
(c) Stella Armour
Re: Cry ~ tanka poem
Posted: Wed Jul 27, 2016 5:37 pm
by ShelleyA
A beautiful heartfelt write and presentation. Good brevity. A skillfully crafted Tanka; perfect form. Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm. Deep expression of emotion. Good word choice. Good alliteration with nice assonance and consonance. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
Re: Cry ~ tanka poem
Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2016 10:16 am
by zephyrwords
So lovely Stella. I've been trying to understand this style of poetry. I've found a couple of different takes on it, so a little confusing (to me), but this is wonderful!
Re: Cry ~ tanka poem
Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2016 11:05 am
by Stella
sometimes it's difficult to be a purist, especially with Japanese forms Colleen , so i would advise you to stick to the 57577 form which most English speaking poets use
Re: Cry ~ tanka poem
Posted: Sat Jul 30, 2016 11:15 am
by zephyrwords
Thank you Stella. I will give it try!
Re: Cry ~ tanka poem
Posted: Sun Aug 14, 2016 11:33 am
by Cindy
This is very lovely, Stella.
Re: Cry ~ tanka poem
Posted: Wed Sep 07, 2016 11:00 am
by Tom Balch
Beautiful Tanka poem, Stella...One we can all relate with...