Summer Clings (Choka)

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Summer Clings (Choka)

Postby Cindy » Wed Nov 09, 2016 1:31 pm

Trampled beneath feet
Yellow, Brown and bleeding leaves
Occasional green
Summer snared on random boughs
Leaching sunny dreams
Warm smiles on friendly faces
Tenacious season
Clings like gum to my faint soul
It's scent in the autumn air.

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Re: Summer Clings (Choka)

Postby Stella » Wed Nov 09, 2016 5:17 pm

Hi Cindy, it is lovely to see you introduce a new format to the site, i like this very much it's not unlike a tanka poem but more interesting and you have included in it some wonderful imagery..

i hope things are getting better for you and yours :)

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Re: Summer Clings (Choka)

Postby Cindy » Wed Nov 09, 2016 5:19 pm

Thank you, Stella.

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Re: Summer Clings (Choka)

Postby Stella » Wed Nov 09, 2016 10:21 pm

you are most welcome my friend♫

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Re: Summer Clings (Choka)

Postby Adette » Sat Nov 12, 2016 3:56 pm

How lovely Cindy - bleeding leaves sad but true you have given Autumn another slant very well written

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Re: Summer Clings (Choka)

Postby Cindy » Sun Nov 13, 2016 12:24 pm

Thank you, Adette.

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Re: Summer Clings (Choka)

Postby Karin Anderson » Tue Nov 15, 2016 4:42 am

A most impressive Choka, as I have not seen one before, and I can imagine it all through your beautiful descriptive images Cindy.

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Re: Summer Clings (Choka)

Postby Cindy » Fri Nov 18, 2016 1:04 am

Thank you, Karin.

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Re: Summer Clings (Choka)

Postby Seema Chowdhury » Sun Dec 18, 2016 4:39 pm

Very nicely composed, nice choice of words.

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Re: Summer Clings (Choka)

Postby Cindy » Thu Dec 22, 2016 10:02 pm

Thank you, Seema.

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Re: Summer Clings (Choka)

Postby ken.brandli » Sun Jan 15, 2017 8:48 am

Nice Choka. Perfectly constructed and with some great imagery. I particularly like 'Summer snared on random boughs'. Well done.

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Re: Summer Clings (Choka)

Postby Cindy » Mon Jan 16, 2017 3:58 am

Thank you, Ken.

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Re: Summer Clings (Choka)

Postby Fay Slimm » Thu Jan 19, 2017 8:09 am

You capture the season's tenacity so well with this interesting form Cindy - love the feel of summer clinging and "snared on random boughs" - great read.

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Re: Summer Clings (Choka)

Postby Cindy » Fri Jan 20, 2017 4:44 pm

Thank you, Fay.


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