Upon The Wooded Hill (an English Sonnet)

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Cindy
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Upon The Wooded Hill (an English Sonnet)

Postby Cindy » Sun Mar 05, 2017 4:03 pm

They say I walk that path along the shore.
A dark and somber figure, they proclaim.
Just as I did a century before...
In whispers, tremble slightly at my name.

A lonely wraith, they're confident 'tis I
Among the shadows cast by pale moonlight.
They tell of those who hear my mournful cry
That sometimes mingles with the dark of night.

But I haunt upon the hill with many trees,
A ghost between the aspen and the pine.
The phantom in the woods that no one sees.
The flora and the fauna, friends of mine.

It is not me who walks beside the lake
And sometimes cries as though her soul will break.

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Re: Upon The Wooded Hill (an English Sonnet)

Postby Stella » Sun Mar 05, 2017 5:22 pm

Haunting and lovely Cindy, leaving the reader wondering who it is that visits the lake in such sadness. :)

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Re: Upon The Wooded Hill (an English Sonnet)

Postby Karin Anderson » Tue Mar 07, 2017 10:37 pm

This is a most impressive sonnet that creates a spooky atmosphere. I really admire how you have used the volta (turn) where it is not you who walks beside the lake. I have enjoyed reading it immensely and have read it three times as I love reading sonnets that are composed so wonderfully Cindy.

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Re: Upon The Wooded Hill (an English Sonnet)

Postby Seema Chowdhury » Tue Mar 07, 2017 11:48 pm

A thought provoking write.

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Re: Upon The Wooded Hill (an English Sonnet)

Postby Cindy » Wed Mar 08, 2017 2:40 am

Thank you everyone for your kind comments.

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Re: Upon The Wooded Hill (an English Sonnet)

Postby Adette » Wed Mar 08, 2017 9:30 pm

mmmmmmmmmmmm makes one think had to read twice quite haunting and so
well written

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Re: Upon The Wooded Hill (an English Sonnet)

Postby Cindy » Thu Mar 09, 2017 1:14 am

Thank you, Adette.


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