Grandfather Mountain

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Cindy
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Grandfather Mountain

Postby Cindy » Tue Nov 25, 2014 2:08 am

Like a grandfather
It watches over
Deciduous whiskers
Cover his rocky face

They took his open hand
Trusting his age-old trails
They would be home for dinner
He would show the way

Like a grandfather
Here before they were born
An unfaultering presence
Reliable

So where are they now?
- Those who were summoned
Expecting to find refuge
And comfort in his bosom
What did they find instead?
- Those who did not return

Like a great grandfather
Feeble with age
Perhaps forgetful

They never came out of the woods
It swallowed them whole
Grandfather mountain sits on his rocker
And can't tell a soul.

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Fay Slimm
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Re: Grandfather Mountain

Postby Fay Slimm » Tue Nov 25, 2014 1:39 pm

A story which uses metaphor and personification to perfection - a read to mull over again Cindy - mountains are grandfathers and care for many but perhaps some take danger too far. Such an interesting poem and thanks for sharing.

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Stella
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Re: Grandfather Mountain

Postby Stella » Tue Nov 25, 2014 8:42 pm

Lovely metaphor in this poem Cindy,and yes, the mountain is akin to a grandfather in time.

He holds the secrets of many souls...

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Karin Anderson
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Re: Grandfather Mountain

Postby Karin Anderson » Thu Nov 27, 2014 6:51 am

Marvelous metaphor and narrative with wonderful imagination and insight. I thoroughly enjoyed it Cindy and thank you for sharing.

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Sandra Martyres
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Re: Grandfather Mountain

Postby Sandra Martyres » Fri Nov 28, 2014 12:06 am

Excellent use of the grandfather metaphor in this poem...tfs Cindy


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