Leave It.

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Fay Slimm
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Leave It.

Postby Fay Slimm » Wed Nov 26, 2014 10:26 pm

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Diamond hard
with sharp and bladey edge,
at each lunge
danger-goads thrust
that become inwardly septic.

As passion twists
its fiery words serrated steel
undertakes to
bring by vicious will
each shaking victim to knees.

Anger achieves
but best to leave it well alone.

Fury hurts most
those whom to fury are prone.

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Karin Anderson
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Re: Leave It.

Postby Karin Anderson » Thu Nov 27, 2014 1:37 am

Leave it indeed is certainly the way to go with your powerful penning. The strong message in the last two lines is brilliant and "each shaking victim to knees" really stood out for me too Fay

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Stella
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Re: Leave It.

Postby Stella » Thu Nov 27, 2014 10:46 am

I love your poetic phrases Fay, it is true that when you vent anger at someone you are really hurting yourself, anger like jealousy is a very negative emotion.

I. like Karin thought the last two lines were brilliant...

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Sandra Martyres
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Re: Leave It.

Postby Sandra Martyres » Fri Nov 28, 2014 2:17 am

You take poetry to another level Fay.. The closing lines are pwerful and a the perfect ending to this piece.


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