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Restless ~ a diminished hexaverse
Posted: Wed Jan 28, 2015 9:57 am
by Stella
Gleaming warmth from twilight
sweet soothes my aching soul
yet leaves me much too soon
coaxing fearful night chills
to find me twixt sad sheets
beneath the midnight sky
Low moon-talk steals sleep
and bright twinkling stars
spellbind these tired eyes
how restless the night
midnight wakefulness
Shadows that haunt
dance on cold walls
nightmares beckon
aloneness weeps
Teardrops fall
pillows damp
missing love
In dreams
I find
You
©Stella Armour 2011-06-23
(Diminished hexaverse;
in the "How to" section)
Re: Restless ~ a diminished hexaverse
Posted: Wed Jan 28, 2015 1:26 pm
by Sandra Martyres
Another complex format easily conquered...a very nostalgic piece that brings tears to the reader's eye. A beautiful write Stella!
Re: Restless ~ a diminished hexaverse
Posted: Wed Jan 28, 2015 8:16 pm
by Tom Balch
A beautifully penned piece and great use of form, Stella.
Re: Restless ~ a diminished hexaverse
Posted: Thu Jan 29, 2015 2:27 am
by Karin Anderson
The picture complements the poem beautifully and I admire the use of form as well and how the last line becomes "you". You put your heart and soul into this haunting write my dear friend and I am pleased nightmares turned to dreams...
Re: Restless ~ a diminished hexaverse
Posted: Thu Jan 29, 2015 6:25 pm
by Nightmute
That feeling of being alone comes through so clearly through this write, Stella. The desire for sleep to come so that we can bathe in the memories of the one we are missing, and yet the night almost seems to hold back the sleep we so long for. Beautiful write in a wonderful format, Stella.
Re: Restless ~ a diminished hexaverse
Posted: Fri Jan 30, 2015 4:37 am
by Cindy
This is deliciously melancholly. Love it.