Wilderswill (Tanka)

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ken.brandli
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Wilderswill (Tanka)

Postby ken.brandli » Sun Feb 08, 2015 7:45 am

ImageIMGP7875 Switzerland Wengen Jungfrau North Face at Night by Dave Curtis, on Flickr

from our balcony
Jungfrau in her white mantle
evening splendour
and in the cool crisp morning
wake to the sound of cow bells
Last edited by ken.brandli on Sat Feb 14, 2015 11:25 am, edited 1 time in total.

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Cindy
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Re: Wilderswill (Tanka)

Postby Cindy » Sun Feb 08, 2015 1:35 pm

This has a very peaceful feel to it. I like it.

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Re: Wilderswill (Tanka)

Postby denysruak » Sun Feb 08, 2015 1:45 pm

Ken, I am so glad to see you posting here so we can learn from you. In advance, I am looking forward to your tutorials on the wonders of Japanese forms of poetry so please may we have your guidance and thoughts. Mountains and forests are my favourite aspects of nature, although most of my attempts on the subject matter have been about wild animals in an alliterative/acrostic format (which I call Aruaku). Your write here is a lovely combination of a mountain, bell chimes and cows - one couldn't get more perfect than that!

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Re: Wilderswill (Tanka)

Postby Stella » Sun Feb 08, 2015 5:32 pm

A lovely scene you have set for us Ken, rather serene and very calming..

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Re: Wilderswill (Tanka)

Postby Fay Slimm » Sun Feb 08, 2015 10:25 pm

How wonderful to have that perfect picture of waking to a white-mantled mountain and cow bells - the tanka form suits this write on nature so well. Good to see you posting here Ken.

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Re: Wilderswill (Tanka)

Postby ken.brandli » Sat Feb 14, 2015 11:27 am

Thank you all for the lovely comments. Lovely to be among friends on this forum. Sorry about the extra line in the Tanka. Fixed now...I should know better than publish late at night when I am tired.

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Re: Wilderswill (Tanka)

Postby Karin Anderson » Sun Feb 15, 2015 4:22 am

What a picturesque Tanka your pen paints, and the cow bell's sound and the feel of cool crisp morning sets if off beautifully Ken.

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Re: Wilderswill (Tanka)

Postby Tom Balch » Fri Mar 06, 2015 1:33 pm

A wonderful way to greet the day.

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Re: Wilderswill (Tanka)

Postby stevenstirk » Sat Mar 14, 2015 10:15 pm

Lovely piece Ken


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