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Painted Reflections

Posted: Sat Feb 14, 2015 7:54 pm
by denysruak
Painted Reflections

While walking down a cobbled street
reading a book or two,
there came to mind in an offbeat way
painted reflections of you -
..... the way you smile
..... your hair in the wind.

While sitting in a country lane
mending my old canoe,
there came my way in a hazy light
painted reflections of you -
..... a tear on your cheek
..... your song of joy.

While riding along a muddy road
pedaling out of cue,
there came to pass across my eyes
painted reflections of you -
..... your hand in my hand
..... your sighs in the dark.

And when I reached a cul de sac
coloured a pale blue,
they came, ebbing from my weary head,
painted reflections of you -
..... yours whispers in my ear
..... and your love that's gone.

(C) Denys Ruak 1971
All rights reserved.

Re: Painted Reflections

Posted: Sat Feb 14, 2015 9:43 pm
by Stella
A wonderful form you have written in Denys , i liked the rhyme scheme and repetition very much.

Memories portrayed in painted reflections were everywhere you went and so she is not completely gone from you..

Re: Painted Reflections

Posted: Tue Feb 17, 2015 11:37 am
by ken.brandli
Agree with Stella. Nice form and imagery with the repetition of the key theme adding to the effectiveness of the poem.

Re: Painted Reflections

Posted: Tue Feb 17, 2015 11:12 pm
by antoine
The mind paints what the heart wants the eyes to see. All the senses at work here trying to recreate moments in time that brought great joy to the author. Little compensation for the loved ones actual presence but sometimes it is enough to get us through, that we just go 'ahh' and shed a tear at the memory.
This is quite beautiful Denys. Thanks for sharing.

Re: Painted Reflections

Posted: Wed Feb 18, 2015 10:41 am
by eleanor prince
Outch! I really felt that last line. Such a beautiful, wistful poem made all the more potent by the snatches of life painted with such appealing candour. Much enjoyed

Re: Painted Reflections

Posted: Wed Feb 18, 2015 11:20 pm
by Joseph Anderson
Sweet,tender with great nostalgiaThough sad and wistful it was still a joyous read.The closing couplets in each stanza added impact. A great read

Re: Painted Reflections

Posted: Thu Feb 19, 2015 9:40 am
by Tom Balch
Beautifully sad is this piece, Joseph and very well crafted too.