The Lady Of Heart

[antoine]

I really liked the use of the 'pet' terms - the reddish peddish and the others. They mean something only to the lovers and lovers will laugh at the reactions of others who are not sharing their cloud, to their playfulness. This is more intimate than it first appears. The last stanza was such a firework "even my sun-naked tongue" - 'broken flakes of serebe winds" are just - wow! i feel this is the best of yours that I have read Arsh.

[Cindy]

I love the last two lines. I love how the second to last line skips off the tongue. I love your choice of words. Lovely.