That Winter Morning

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Sandra Martyres
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That Winter Morning

Postby Sandra Martyres » Sun Feb 15, 2015 4:01 pm

The stillness of a winter morn,
She felt it at the break of dawn,
Seeing the thick mist on the lawn,
Hiding buds waiting to be born.
Still sleepy, as she stifled a yawn
She saw Grandpa looking forlorn,
Gran's death left him tired and worn.

She greeted him effusively,
And he responded lovingly.
She made him breakfast hurriedly
He pecked at it reluctantly.
Although he liked to eat heartily.
She tried coaxing him worriedly
But he refused adamantly.

She made him walk in the garden,
Warning that his bones would harden.
He treated her like his warden.
When tired, he sought her pardon
And lay down - the end was sudden.
That day he joined Gran in heaven,
Shedding his last lonely burden.
Last edited by Sandra Martyres on Wed Feb 18, 2015 3:59 pm, edited 1 time in total.

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Stella
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Re: That Winter Morning

Postby Stella » Sun Feb 15, 2015 10:49 pm

Aw bless him..

I like the mono rhyme endings Sandra, and i felt so sorry for Grandpa..

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Fay Slimm
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Re: That Winter Morning

Postby Fay Slimm » Sun Feb 15, 2015 10:57 pm

You capture family love and commitment so well in this verse dear Sandra. Hope Grandpa and Gran are happy together again now.

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Re: That Winter Morning

Postby Karin Anderson » Mon Feb 16, 2015 4:29 am

I very much admire your rhyming couplets and I found the ending a real surprise and loved how Grandpa joined Gran in heaven. My dear friend Sandra, thank you for sharing with me.

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Re: That Winter Morning

Postby Cindy » Mon Feb 16, 2015 10:34 pm

This is very lovely. The fact that grandpa dies is softened by the fact that he is now with Gran.

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Re: That Winter Morning

Postby eleanor prince » Wed Feb 18, 2015 10:51 am

Moving poem. Those moments or hours before the parting can be so poignant and memorable - you have captured this beautifully, Sandra

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Re: That Winter Morning

Postby antoine » Wed Feb 18, 2015 11:05 am

You pay respects to the subjects with dignity and you honour poetry with your adhesion to the style (I havent came across this type before). Your love for both your relatives and your art shine here. Thank you for sharing this unique and poignant write with us.

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Re: That Winter Morning

Postby denysruak » Wed Feb 18, 2015 8:26 pm

A snippet of life beautifully told; Thanks for sharing.

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Tom Balch
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Re: That Winter Morning

Postby Tom Balch » Thu Feb 19, 2015 9:43 am

Beautifully sad and heartfelt, Sandra. The mono rhyme works perfectly.

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Re: That Winter Morning

Postby Seema Chowdhury » Thu Feb 19, 2015 5:52 pm

A Very nice write Sandra, you described it very well.


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