Force Nine or Maybe Ten

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Tom Balch
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Force Nine or Maybe Ten

Postby Tom Balch » Sat Feb 28, 2015 11:35 pm

The wind came screaming from the north
force nine or maybe ten
the sky was black inducing fear
amongst us broken men,
the Captain he was sick in bed
and looking fit to die
the surgeon said he´s coughing blood
as black as that there sky.

The mast was shattered in the storm
the sails were ripped apart
t´was only us six left aboard
from forty at the start,
fresh water kegs had washed away
the rations they were soaked
we had not eaten for three days
our hope and will was broke.

Our ship she floundered in the sea
a sea that boiled with rage
a sea that would take all our lives
and no one will be saved,
t´ was Davy Jones that made a pact
with strong winds from the north
that not a soul would live to see
a brighter day shine forth.

The Captains dead the surgeon said
so now we´re only five
lets pray to God that he can help
us feeble few survive,
we looked at him with knowing eyes
with eyes so filled with fear
we´re dead already said the mate
that sky is drawing near.

The winds they hit with such a force
the timbers they all split
the deck it heaved and broke apart
and splintered into bits,
the storm screamed like a witch on fire
who´s being sent to hell
and we five knew we´d join her soon
none left the tale to tell.

When I awoke face in the sand
I thought I must be dead
or was it just a nightmare dream
been running through my head,
I´ll tell you this my trusty friend
I´ll tell you this for free
never will this man I promise you
sail again the seven seas.
Last edited by Tom Balch on Fri Mar 06, 2015 11:26 am, edited 2 times in total.

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Sandra Martyres
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Re: Force Nine or Maybe Ten

Postby Sandra Martyres » Sun Mar 01, 2015 7:55 am

A vivid and very poignant portrayal of a tale of survival on the high seas.... Beautifully do e Tom.

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Joseph Anderson
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Re: Force Nine or Maybe Ten

Postby Joseph Anderson » Sun Mar 01, 2015 7:17 pm

Tom- a vivid sea saga.I am with you and wont be sailing again.Stirring and dramatic,downright scary.Well told

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Re: Force Nine or Maybe Ten

Postby Cindy » Mon Mar 02, 2015 12:09 pm

I love the story. :-)

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Stella
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Re: Force Nine or Maybe Ten

Postby Stella » Tue Mar 03, 2015 10:50 pm

wow, this is great Tom.

i was there in the storm being lashed by those great waves...wonderful story telling my friend..

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Re: Force Nine or Maybe Ten

Postby Karin Anderson » Wed Mar 04, 2015 9:49 am

A BIG wow from me and the power of this narrative poem is amazing and my favorite line is 'the storm screamed like a witch on fire!' You bring the storm alive on this site and I must go as I am getting sea sick. One of your very very best Tom.

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Re: Force Nine or Maybe Ten

Postby stevenstirk » Sat Mar 14, 2015 9:58 pm

One of your very very best Tom. A masterpiece.


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