When The Flowers Bloom (Pentaiku)

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Cindy
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When The Flowers Bloom (Pentaiku)

Postby Cindy » Fri Apr 03, 2015 1:09 am

How can it be that the earth holds its breath?

the clouds grow darker
and the earth waits silently
Ridged, expecting

Is that why the trees and grass are so still?

even the birds know
and have stopped their sweet singing
the world is silent

The storm will come. Can you hear the thunder?

rodents take cover
they snuggle themselves away
distant rain whispers

Yes, listen. Can you tell me what it says?

the rain holds secrets
as it murmurs cryptic words
only the trees know

Tell me, when will the secrets be revealed?

when flowers bloom
flooding the hills with color
surely, they will tell.

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Re: When The Flowers Bloom (Pentaiku)

Postby Stella » Fri Apr 03, 2015 10:11 am

Cindy, this pentaiku is well penned my friend and a very worthy addition to Tom's challenge.

I really enjoyed your chosen conversational subject and the closing lines i thought were the perfect answer.

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Tom Balch
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Re: When The Flowers Bloom (Pentaiku)

Postby Tom Balch » Fri Apr 03, 2015 12:15 pm

Thank you, Cindy for this beautifully penned Pentaiku which flows wonderfully from question to answer to those perfect end lines. Loved it.

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Re: When The Flowers Bloom (Pentaiku)

Postby Karin Anderson » Sat Apr 04, 2015 5:13 am

A great write and beautifully written adhering to the pentaiku form thank you Cindy.

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Re: When The Flowers Bloom (Pentaiku)

Postby Joseph Anderson » Sat Apr 04, 2015 3:43 pm

Cindy- Your adaptation to this new form is really remarkableThe title sets the tone and I feel right in the of the conversation. A fine job

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Re: When The Flowers Bloom (Pentaiku)

Postby Seema Chowdhury » Tue Apr 07, 2015 3:13 pm

Waiting for the flowers to bloom....., beautiful


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