The Day We Met

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Tom Balch
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The Day We Met

Postby Tom Balch » Tue Apr 07, 2015 12:46 pm

I´ll never forget the day that we met
we met in the park it was just getting dark,
your eyes seem to shine as they looked into mine
I thought that it might just be love at first sight,
we were both on our own so I walked you home
our friendship it grew now I´ll never rue
my walk in the park that night it was dark,
I´ll never forget the friend that I met
a stray cat in the park that night it was dark.

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Stella
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Re: The Day We Met

Postby Stella » Tue Apr 07, 2015 2:28 pm

loved this Tom...such clever rhyming and it flows wonderfully..

you really had me hooked on a romance until that final.. funny feline line..... :D

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Seema Chowdhury
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Re: The Day We Met

Postby Seema Chowdhury » Tue Apr 07, 2015 3:03 pm

Beautiful and a nostalgic write

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Stella
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Re: The Day We Met

Postby Stella » Tue Apr 07, 2015 10:52 pm

i wrote the sequel to this for you Tom... (For Tom).. :D

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Karin Anderson
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Re: The Day We Met

Postby Karin Anderson » Wed Apr 08, 2015 12:50 am

A delightful write with and a humorous conclusion that really makes me smile. I must go and read Stella's sequel now to see what you and the stray cat are really up to are Tom!

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Joseph Anderson
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Re: The Day We Met

Postby Joseph Anderson » Wed Apr 08, 2015 2:01 pm

Tom-Just great innerweaving of rhyme.Reminds me of EA Poe.A unigue and unusual pairing had me fooled up to the very end A purr fect write

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stevenstirk
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Re: The Day We Met

Postby stevenstirk » Mon Apr 13, 2015 4:04 pm

You certainly took me down the wrong road there Tom. Enjoyed
the poem and loved the ending.

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Cindy
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Re: The Day We Met

Postby Cindy » Tue Apr 14, 2015 10:25 am

Love the unexpected ending. Nice.


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