On Being Told

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Tom Balch
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On Being Told

Postby Tom Balch » Fri May 01, 2015 6:17 pm

When that incoming tide
of emotion
stops you dead in the tracks
that you start,
hair tingling shivers
and eye clouding tears
are just signs
that you´re falling apart.

That sledgehammer pounding
hard in your heart,
the thumping that sounds
in your mind,
shows that the floods
are waiting to start
with the ice cold sweats
that travel your spine.

When that incoming tide
of emotion
shatters the calmness that you
hold so dear,
you´re left in the wilderness
pleading for more
in a world now so strange
and so filled with fear.

Wishing to be told
that it just isn't true
and not hearing the words
they are speaking at you.

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stevenstirk
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Re: On Being Told

Postby stevenstirk » Fri May 01, 2015 9:39 pm

I feel like that every day. What I have found, is that the
older one gets, it seems that the emotions are more raw
and magnified. Loved the imagery here Tom .

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Stella
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Re: On Being Told

Postby Stella » Fri May 01, 2015 9:48 pm

It's horrible , that pounding feeling that that engulfs you.. and Tom you have penned it so well that i know you have been there..

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Nightmute
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Re: On Being Told

Postby Nightmute » Fri May 01, 2015 10:06 pm

Caught in that very real and frightening moment of extreme pain and distress, Tom, and you convey it so well in this riveting write, sir.

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Karin Anderson
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Re: On Being Told

Postby Karin Anderson » Sat May 02, 2015 7:05 am

Powerful and vivid penning on going through the depths of despair, and thank God we can use writing to express our innermost pain Tom.

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Sandra Martyres
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Re: On Being Told

Postby Sandra Martyres » Sat May 02, 2015 8:22 am

I can relate to this all too familiar pounding feeling and the flood of emotions that accomany it....great write and brilliant imagery Tom

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Seema Chowdhury
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Re: On Being Told

Postby Seema Chowdhury » Tue May 05, 2015 12:49 am

Tide of emotion.... Nice


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