My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)

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Stella
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My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)

Postby Stella » Thu May 07, 2015 10:13 pm

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What is your most beautiful time of day?

Just as the dawn breaks
In the pink blush of morning
I hear the birds sing.

But what if it is raining when you wake?

I hear the patter
Of raindrops like tiny feet
Tip tapping so sweet.

What is your really treasured time of day?

It must be twilight
When shadows begin to fall
I love most of all.

But why do you like darkness more than day?

I like the soft hush
And the serenity too
A time to renew

Do you not like it when the sun is high?

That is time to work
And i must have my employ
No space to find joy.

Then your time is the dawn and close of day?

I like solitude
And the calm of restful light
Neath the stars at night.

© Stella Armour 2015

* pentaiku .. Tom's new form

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Re: My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)

Postby Karin Anderson » Fri May 08, 2015 6:16 am

A lovely pentaiku and it is great to see this form appear again with beautiful penning. True to your name 'Stella' you prefer the serenity and I love how you are 'neath the stars in your closing line.

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Re: My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)

Postby Tom Balch » Fri May 08, 2015 7:22 am

This is absolutely beautiful, Stella. Exactly how I feel the form should be and the end lines to the answers rhyme perfectly. Thank you so much for sharing this wonderful poem. You should be huffing on nails and rubbing them on shirt. Love it so much.

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Re: My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)

Postby Nightmute » Fri May 08, 2015 8:38 am

I do so like how the queries, put forth, and the answers given allow for depth and clarity on the subject presented, Stella. An intelligent form that allows for beautiful responses to logical and well-thought questions, Ma'am. I deeply appreciate the beauty and the aptly cogent and puissantly astute nature of this form, Stella. Kudos, Ma'am!

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Re: My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)

Postby Joseph Anderson » Fri May 08, 2015 3:51 pm

Running with a new style and running well.This type of poetry should be read aloud by two ,one to query and one to respond Perhap you and Tom
have launched a new way to go.

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Re: My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)

Postby Sandra Martyres » Sat May 09, 2015 9:17 am

Wow this is a wonderful style... And you have definitely done justice to it... Shall check out Tom's piece too

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Re: My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)

Postby Seema Chowdhury » Sun May 10, 2015 2:22 am

It's true, dawn is the most beautiful time of the day.

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Re: My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)

Postby Fay Slimm » Sun May 10, 2015 7:47 am

Such a beautifully readable form - the back and forth of question and answer enthralls the reader. A wonderful poem dear Stella.

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Re: My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)

Postby stevenstirk » Sun May 10, 2015 12:54 pm

A delightful write in this comfy format. I agree with
Fays comment. My best time is bedtime after a few
Jack Daniels, and a pint of Guinness.


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