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My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)
Posted: Thu May 07, 2015 10:13 pm
by Stella
What is your most beautiful time of day?
Just as the dawn breaks
In the pink blush of morning
I hear the birds sing.
But what if it is raining when you wake?
I hear the patter
Of raindrops like tiny feet
Tip tapping so sweet.
What is your really treasured time of day?
It must be twilight
When shadows begin to fall
I love most of all.
But why do you like darkness more than day?
I like the soft hush
And the serenity too
A time to renew
Do you not like it when the sun is high?
That is time to work
And i must have my employ
No space to find joy.
Then your time is the dawn and close of day?
I like solitude
And the calm of restful light
Neath the stars at night.
© Stella Armour 2015
* pentaiku .. Tom's new form
Re: My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)
Posted: Fri May 08, 2015 6:16 am
by Karin Anderson
A lovely pentaiku and it is great to see this form appear again with beautiful penning. True to your name 'Stella' you prefer the serenity and I love how you are 'neath the stars in your closing line.
Re: My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)
Posted: Fri May 08, 2015 7:22 am
by Tom Balch
This is absolutely beautiful, Stella. Exactly how I feel the form should be and the end lines to the answers rhyme perfectly. Thank you so much for sharing this wonderful poem. You should be huffing on nails and rubbing them on shirt. Love it so much.
Re: My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)
Posted: Fri May 08, 2015 8:38 am
by Nightmute
I do so like how the queries, put forth, and the answers given allow for depth and clarity on the subject presented, Stella. An intelligent form that allows for beautiful responses to logical and well-thought questions, Ma'am. I deeply appreciate the beauty and the aptly cogent and puissantly astute nature of this form, Stella. Kudos, Ma'am!
Re: My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)
Posted: Fri May 08, 2015 3:51 pm
by Joseph Anderson
Running with a new style and running well.This type of poetry should be read aloud by two ,one to query and one to respond Perhap you and Tom
have launched a new way to go.
Re: My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)
Posted: Sat May 09, 2015 9:17 am
by Sandra Martyres
Wow this is a wonderful style... And you have definitely done justice to it... Shall check out Tom's piece too
Re: My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)
Posted: Sun May 10, 2015 2:22 am
by Seema Chowdhury
It's true, dawn is the most beautiful time of the day.
Re: My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)
Posted: Sun May 10, 2015 7:47 am
by Fay Slimm
Such a beautifully readable form - the back and forth of question and answer enthralls the reader. A wonderful poem dear Stella.
Re: My Time of Day (pentaiku poem)
Posted: Sun May 10, 2015 12:54 pm
by stevenstirk
A delightful write in this comfy format. I agree with
Fays comment. My best time is bedtime after a few
Jack Daniels, and a pint of Guinness.