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In Thought ~ sonnet
Posted: Thu May 28, 2015 11:57 am
by Stella
Do you find me quiet in thought tonight?
Am i not but a shadow on the sea?
adrift and floating far ‘til out of sight
soft shallows murmur lullabies to me.
Seduced by lapping shores the sweetest kiss
of longing finds the rhythm of my soul,
into this flow streams an ecstatic bliss
embracing ripples soothed by ocean’s roll.
So leave me be whilst in my own caress
for here there is no depth or shape to keep
like clouds i am, then i am not or less,
so sensual just let me slip to sleep.
Refreshed, my eyes seek out a bright new day
Where sunlight glints on waves across the bay.
© Stella Armour 28-05 -2015
( English sonnets are notoriously difficult to get right
to be true to the form( see our list), and so this is the last one
i shall write...
)
Re: In Thought ~ sonnet
Posted: Thu May 28, 2015 1:43 pm
by Cindy
This is so beautiful. It describes falling to sleep perfectly. I have never written a sonnet. I can see how they would be difficult. You're very good at it.
Re: In Thought ~ sonnet
Posted: Thu May 28, 2015 2:43 pm
by Nightmute
This compelling and astute write brings into perspective not only the finite size of us, as human beings, when compared with the sea, but just how fleeting, too, our lives are in comparison to that body of water that stretches forth, seemingly, forever, Stella. But we can feel the changes within us that are known by the oceans and the lapping waves that throw themselves against the near and distant shores, Ma'am. I've not truly written a sonnet, ever, so I cannot adequately grasp the difficulty of the form. Trying to think in iambs while composing a verse would probably cause me to tear my hair out, I reckon. That you have written many of them, and written them so proficiently and beautifully, shows just how skilled you are in the craft of writing, Stella. Perhaps, then, there shall be more, and this won't be your last, Ma'am? I certainly hope you will pen more...though I freely admit that it is selfishness on my part that causes me to put forth the request.
Re: In Thought ~ sonnet
Posted: Fri May 29, 2015 1:17 pm
by Karin Anderson
You are a remarkable sonneteer Stella, as you are not only an expert with iambic pentameter, but are able to adhere to the story telling requirements of a sonnet, you kindly explained to me. The question in the first verse, then deliberating further down until the resolve in the last stanza.
As Cindy comments this IS so beautiful and I do appreciate all the time you have taken to craft this English Sonnet. Hopefully you will write more of them if something really inspires you Stella.
Re: In Thought ~ sonnet
Posted: Fri May 29, 2015 3:53 pm
by Seema Chowdhury
A magical write, it flows beautifully and freely.
Re: In Thought ~ sonnet
Posted: Sun May 31, 2015 3:52 pm
by Stella
Thank you so much everyone
Re: In Thought ~ sonnet
Posted: Mon Jun 01, 2015 12:36 pm
by Fay Slimm
A fine example of the difficult English Sonnet - - the words flow gently and rhyme so well - - loud applause for this effort and hope it will not be your last one dear Stella.
Re: In Thought ~ sonnet
Posted: Mon Jun 15, 2015 10:22 pm
by Joseph Anderson
I love sonnets and this one certainly rares very high Please don't make this your last.You have the ability and do them excellantly. I can't find anything
to be critical of.
Re: In Thought ~ sonnet
Posted: Tue Jun 16, 2015 7:09 pm
by stevenstirk
I loved this Stella. I never follow much of a form. It is the
words I follow, and the way you capture the meandering
mind.