The Hourglass

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The Hourglass

Postby SyberRose » Mon Jun 22, 2015 12:07 am

Smoldering embers of yesterday
wafting in the breeze_
Silken hues of crimson,
haunt as well as tease.

Echoes of ethereal sighs
from the peaks of mountain tops
Within the halo of the fog,
and early dawns dew drops.

A clandestine love affair
in shadows of what could have been_
Vanishes within the hourglass,
and sienna sands therein.

The wraith of romance knocks
at threshold of my door_
Apparition of a stranger,
tantalizes…once more.

©SyberRose 2015
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Re: The Hourglass

Postby Fay Slimm » Mon Jun 22, 2015 10:33 am

A wonderful summary of romantic attraction bound into a verse full of beautiful imagery - a well-crafted and delightful read - thank you for posting it Rose.

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Re: The Hourglass

Postby Stella » Mon Jun 22, 2015 8:09 pm

The second verse was so beautifully penned Rose, an absolute gem of imagery..

The ethereal feel is sensual and delightful in this tantalizing piece of romance Rose..

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Re: The Hourglass

Postby SyberRose » Mon Jun 22, 2015 9:39 pm

Thank you so much Fay and Stella...for peeking in and visiting today...hope you both had a nice day...Rose:)
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Re: The Hourglass

Postby Nightmute » Tue Jun 23, 2015 7:57 pm

The flow, the rhyming scheme, and the alliteration are most wonderfully done to give unto us a nostalgic air in this gorgeous write, SR. As Fay says, this is a well-crafted poem, Ma'am.

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Re: The Hourglass

Postby SyberRose » Tue Jun 23, 2015 8:14 pm

Thank you for peeking in today Nightmute...I appreciate your visit as always...Rose:)
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Re: The Hourglass

Postby Joseph Anderson » Tue Sep 01, 2015 10:24 pm

Poetry in a classic veinA beauty all the way.A joy to read and contemplate on.Great flowing cadence, near perfect rhyme

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Re: The Hourglass

Postby drllrd74 » Wed Sep 02, 2015 3:39 am

Puts the mind at ease. Nice write. C.R.

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Re: The Hourglass

Postby Ratliff » Thu Sep 03, 2015 5:15 pm

Bravo bravo what great images you create Love the second stanza metaphores painted like Picasso well crafted all the way through
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Re: The Hourglass

Postby Ratliff » Mon Sep 07, 2015 3:33 pm

Was re-reading and oddly the final verse reminded me of Poes the raven sort of in reverse
Evermore not never more -- knock as if someone gently rapping Oh well these are just odd thoughts


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