Smile 2.0

[Ratliff]

The smile. 2.0
http://www.amazon.com/author/richardratliff

I set out to describe someone:
My ideal woman.
The sparkling blue hypnotic eyes
More than sapphires or the skies
Eyes that capture my inner thoughts

Luminous hair; bright and vibrant
Framing her graceful fragrant neck.
And highlighting a wry cheshire smile
A resonant voice; even when silent
All leading me like a moth to a flame

Can't forget her breasts
Not distracting but intriguing
Waist and hips softly seamless
Toned but warm and velvet soft
The tender feel of my quest


Abundant legs of athletic proportions
With finely sculptured feet and ankles
A prima ballerina of emotions
Dancing around my heart

Mind of engaging empathetic intellect
A woman of complex and lasting beauty
Has captivated me for all time

Copyright 2015
Richard l Ratliff

[Ratliff]

Update of my previous post think it is greatly improved check them both and comment

[Stella]

i often do this as well Rick, go back to a poem and change some of it. I enjoyed the first version and i enjoyed the revised version just as well although it was slightly different... , in another few months you may well be tempted to change it again and each reader will find something they like about each version.