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Snake

Posted: Sat Sep 05, 2015 3:50 pm
by Ratliff
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The snake slithers around my cheeks
It's fangs attack my face.
And I suck in oxygen's grace
My lungs are almost spent
As nicotine stained fingers grip the viper's face.
Ashamed of listening to the serpent

Clouds rising from white chalk predicts.
Venomous signals swirling on the River Styx
While the path I traveled pulls on my fate
As Charon awaits payment at the dock's gate.

Copyright 2015
Richard L Ratliff
http://www.amazon.com/author/richardratliff

Re: Snake

Posted: Sun Sep 06, 2015 2:33 am
by Ratliff
a112yearoldman wrote:A fascinatingly unique rendition - I presume about smoking!

You are correct thanks

Re: Snake

Posted: Sun Sep 06, 2015 6:26 pm
by Stella
Really well done, cigarette smoke does "Snake" into circles and your lungs slithering into the smallest channels to annoy and irritate until finally it spits its venomous cancer.

What a wonderful metaphor you have used Rick :)

Re: Snake

Posted: Mon Sep 07, 2015 9:25 am
by Fay Slimm
Can relate to this one Rick - though now long ago I encouraged that viper and felt the same shame. A good read.

Re: Snake

Posted: Mon Sep 07, 2015 1:05 pm
by Seema Chowdhury
very creative indeed.

Re: Snake

Posted: Mon Sep 07, 2015 1:28 pm
by Cindy
Unique description. Clever.