Just Take My Hand (An Ottava Rima Poem)

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Karin Anderson
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Just Take My Hand (An Ottava Rima Poem)

Postby Karin Anderson » Sat Jan 24, 2015 11:13 am



(Video by Listening Earth)


Just take my hand, it’s my delight today
To show you where maidenhair fern drips lace.
We’ll seek Australian breeze of come-what-may
To reveal stone steps to our secret place.
So down we go on the stone's' grisaille grey
As shadows flicker evenfall’s last trace,
When flimsy mist slips off its silver shawl
And morn’s soft light lifts to moon’s curtain call.

Air huffs our hair as wattle’s fuzzy floss
And look! There’s feathers near the ghost gum tree,
With bottle brush and daises near white moss
And kangaroo paws' rich red blooms to see.
Now we’ll scan for spanning wings far across
Sapphire skies grand sweep of enraptured glee.
Dawn’s chorus leads this love affair of hearts
Where dreams begin and soon our swooning starts.

Yellow-faced honeyeater birds with flair
Stream a warm liquid call in sunlight’s song.
Kookaburra’s cackled mirth can’t compare
To wagtails' flicks as they chit-chit along.
Fairy-wrens twitting and raven’s drawl share
A bush symphony as crows caws prolong.
Now our spirits soar birds' 'Ode-To-Joy' bliss
As chicks in moss birds' nests are blown our kiss!


Karin Anderson © 2015

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Tom Balch
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Re: Just Take My Hand (An Ottava Rima Poem)

Postby Tom Balch » Sat Jan 24, 2015 12:38 pm

Well, I must thank you , Karin for taking me on such a beautiful trip in the Australian breeze.Great use of form, wonderful imagery and beautiful poetry. Loved it.

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Re: Just Take My Hand (An Ottava Rima Poem)

Postby Stella » Sat Jan 24, 2015 4:47 pm

Ah, i am relaxed within minutes of listening to this beautiful birdsong Karin.. one bird is whistling as i type...lol

oh so beautiful, your poetry and i am always in awe of the imagery that it provides..so soothing, just perfect!

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Re: Just Take My Hand (An Ottava Rima Poem)

Postby Joseph Anderson » Tue Jan 27, 2015 5:04 pm

Karin-you have pictured your fair land as I oft have done and in a splendid,remarkable way.There is nothing to compare with all things natural.Tis like a beautiful painting an ode to the birds

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Re: Just Take My Hand (An Ottava Rima Poem)

Postby Nightmute » Tue Jan 27, 2015 8:40 pm

I believe I've seen this form used before, though I cannot recall it being put to use in such an extravagant and beautiful way, Karin. You thrill us with the observations made and excite us through the beautiful descriptiveness given, Ma'am. A sheer joy to read this uplifting and gorgeous write!

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Re: Just Take My Hand (An Ottava Rima Poem)

Postby Sandra Martyres » Wed Jan 28, 2015 8:28 am

A tricky form Karin, but you have mastered it..Thanks for taking us through this beautiful Australian journey with your vivid and exciting descriptive poetry!


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